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Defeated Long Ago
Defeated Long Ago
by KENJI SAKURAI
Memoirs of the wind
carry your trumpets
from days lost into
oblivion.
Lucid visions entail
a sketch of something
you could not acheive.
You're methods and
motives are not of
the most high.
You seek to kill me,
you fancy my blood,
running over your
chalice of rusted
tin.
Our tongues locked in
a battle beyond cold
threats and fists of
rage.
You promised me failure,
I gave you more than gold.
Enscribed into steel scrolls
and slates of proclaimed
prominance, I left you
behind.
You are exhiled to the outer
ramparts now, isolated,
neutrolized.
You are just like the devil:
defeated long ago.
-KENJI SAKURAI
Copyright 2005. KENJI SAKURAI all rights reserved.
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Comment by: - 2006-05-11 14:25
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| Like nightmares, your imagery is superb. You i just thought about it now, Kenji Sakurai is a very unusual name. I like it but unusual. Kind of fits your poems unusual but a good read. |
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| Kenji, excellent word choice and a good punch at the end. --Robert Barlow |
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Comment by: - 2006-03-21 19:55
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| I don't know much about poetry, but I thought this was pretty cool. ^_^ |
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| I thought it was pretty good. |
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| Wow Kenji, this is brilliant. On first read I didn't follow the meaning entirely but it didn't matter, it was powerful and vivid. On second read I read it aloud and the meaning was clear and moving. Somehow it is both savage and touching. I think this is really excellent and I hope you are submitting it for publication. If you are, there are a couple of misspelt words that I don't *think* are intentional that you might want to clean up first. Bravo! |
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