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Comment by: tcbswan - 2007-05-25 00:45
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| what a great piece--so nice how you take the puzzle piece a metaphor for a life (perhaps) made to fit where it doesn't belong, where it was never meant to be, WOW! that's cool--hahaha. i agree with dennis, you don't really need the 'long since glued and framed'. excellent! |
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Comment by: - 2007-03-15 12:33
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u know i luv this poem!!!
we really should get together and collab on a story...i bet itd be tizight!!! :)
GOOD WORK |
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Wow...I really really like this piece. The wording is perfect and the overall idea is one many can relate to. Without a doubt, your best piece. Good write!
C |
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I like that clever play on like sounding words at the end that actually defines an epiphany. Well done!
The second line seems a bit long and awkward. Perhaps "long since glued together and framed."
Otherwise a great piece. |
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Comment by: - 2007-03-09 18:23
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Wow that is so awesome. Great reflections of things done in the past. I like the except (accept) lines. I can't explain why its so wonderful. I think its just that in 60 words you conveyed a univeral feeling of cramming things where they dont belong, or finding out something you thought fit in your life didn't after all. Or maybe this is very literal and you had a puzzle piece in the wrong place. lol. I'm bookshelving it, because its that good! :)
Thanks for this,
Best wishes, jenn |
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