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tootwitchy
Adam Keen
United States, georgia, Atlanta

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pretend

Pretend
Share life
barely able to bare,
Pretend
Compromise
Be fair
Night fall
Sunrise
ask you where you've been.
Headaches, squinty eyes
You don't remember where.
Clothes off, story time
Pretend
Sitting in the chair
naked now, telling lies
expecting me to care
Naked now, blood does rise
Faking how, playing house
look at us now
we're quite the pair;
Pretend

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dlynn Comment by: dlynn - 2007-09-25 19:49
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Your nice writing style, word choices and
flow made for a very nice read.
I enjoyed it.
xxsasha1xx Comment by: xxsasha1xx - 2007-08-03 20:18
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This actually sounds like a song......I like it.Now all your missing is your sturmming guitar.
Anne Comment by: Anne - 2007-03-27 21:32
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Great work. I like this very much

Thank for sharing
niceandy Comment by: niceandy - 2007-03-10 15:35
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I really like the way you have 'bookended' thisa with the same word - it throws the poem in an interesting direction. It made me think of Psychoanalysis - and the mind-babble that popular culture is swamped ny.
chromehorserace Comment by: chromehorserace - 2007-03-09 18:52
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I like it. You do a lot with a little. Nice word choices. I get a feeling of sardonic despair when I read it.
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