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jtkleeme
Jeff Kleemeyer
United States, tx, fort worth

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Sad.

It came home when I was talking with my cousins after the funeral.
It struck me that my cousin's yet unborn child would never know him.

This brought the first tears to my eyes.

I realized this child would never know the wonderful man
I knew as a child.

A sudden truth of mortality burned into my mind.
A simple truth I had never considered.

They would never go fishing with him.
They would never hear him roar and bellow.
They would never hear his exaggerated stories.
They would never hear him snore in his chair.

My silly bombastic grandfather was really gone.

No more seeing that awful disgusting chewed up stub of a cigar.
No more barely intelligible garble about nose drops.
No more watching him heavily salt and pepper cantaloupe.
No more riding around looking at bulldozers and semi trucks.

He was really gone and MY children would never know him.
He really is gone and I never told him goodbye.

Sad.

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Grounded Vertigo Comment by: Grounded Vertigo - 2007-04-14 06:35
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This is a beautiful and heartfelt piece of writing. You've really captured the moment when the realisation that someone is no longer there hits you. Thank you for sharing.
Comment by: - 2007-03-24 02:08
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I would never allow myself to critique such a beautiful and heartfelt tribute. Leave it be.
jtkleeme Comment by: jtkleeme - 2007-03-23 11:46
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I used they to apply neuter gender. This also was used to pivot to the plural. This was originally a comment on another poem and I just chopped it up and polished it.

--JTK--
Rookie Comment by: Rookie - 2007-03-23 08:50
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We have all felt that pain of loss. The regrets of words unsaid. Good job.

I only have one thing and I am not sure how you would fix it.

I realized (this) child would never know the wonderful man. ---single tense

They (implies more then one) would never go fishing with him.
They
They
They

maybe this child would never.....

or you could have been impling that all the children to come would never... JMO

Pam
jtkleeme Comment by: jtkleeme - 2007-03-21 18:54
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I intended to exibit how sometimes it is the very human and quirky things about us that cause us to be indearing to others and how it is odd what we miss when people pass away. If you knew him you would understand.

Thanks all! Especially all of you who help to keep my dander up. My life would be meaningless unless I'm pissing somebody off. <hee hee preposition at the end of a sentence somebody spank my bottom> I shall file this one directly into one of my cockles.

Please forgive me for being truly insane. I do it well. That must count for something. Please read 'Chapter!' to gain more insight into the true workings of my brain and tell me how you would deal with such a twisted gift. Is it safe for a surrealist to be a gonzo? I'm the guy who sharpend the knife and paid the postage for Picaso but whinced at the bloody mess. Don't stretch my furniature unless you bring lunch.

--JTK--
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