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anniefiddle
Annie Macfarlane
United Kingdom

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Arachnophilia

They hang around at night inside my window,
dangling like hangmen through a haze
of cobwebs,
their lifeless, living limbs drooping like tassels.
I catch them in the morning:
"We're practising", they say, and show me a
trapeze act of leap, bounce and scuttle.
I feel their heavy bodies yo-yo through the dark.

They bind and sook the brittle, muslin-winged beasties, who
float like dreams through open sashes.
"We never fall", they say, and cling to ceilings,
suspended on those fragile, hairy stalks that
carry them like drops of water.
They say, "We've mastered three dimensions" and show me,
their heavy, white-flecked bodies spinning
cartwheels as they work their macrame.

They watch me with their small,
well-meaning, unresentful
faces as I sweep their work away.
"We'll try again", they say, and
drop
to
the
floor.

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Harmonica Comment by: Harmonica - 2007-12-14 07:40
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Full of vivid descriptions - and quite ambiguous. Revealing both the menacing side of creepy crawlies and the inoffensive playful qualities as well 'I feel their heavy bodies yo-yo through the dark.' Really good stuff! - - Jim Wilson
danieldarwell Comment by: danieldarwell - 2007-03-10 20:28
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I love the line 'They say, "We've mastered three dimensions" and show me,'. I wouldn't normally be a great fan of poems involving spiders, particularly when they have names like 'Arachnophilia' that suggest (though maybe only to me) something moderately creepy. But you half won me over when the spiders said 'We're practising', and I was sold by the declaration that they had mastered three dimensions. Well done:)
digitalcannibal Comment by: digitalcannibal - 2007-03-10 17:08
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I like this piece. It's innocent and childlike yet has a certain maturity to it. I enjoy it.
Lucy Lepchani Comment by: Lucy Lepchani - 2007-03-10 14:26
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As an arachnophobe, I read this whilst supressing a cringe, but was fascinated. You have captured the spirit of these little devils with beautiful imagery.I really love this (sort of, if you know what I mean...)
thecandystore Comment by: thecandystore - 2007-03-10 14:09
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I too agree with niceandy...I enjoyed the use of personifcation. The poem has a good flow as well. Nicely done.

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