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Don't Look Away
Watch my mouth
As I speak.
Keep your focus on
These lips,
Full of words,
Full with flesh.
Think of how my mouth would feel
On yours,
Wet and open and willing.
Think of how my lips would taste
Between your teeth,
Against your cheekbone,
Across your neck
In a soft sweep of in-between.
Watch my mouth
As I think.
My mind whirs
While my lips pout,
And fidget,
And open without sound.
Just because my mouth stops,
It doesn't mean that the thoughts have ceased.
I study the way
Your eyes blink slowly,
Drugged by the movement
Of my lips,
And dizzied by the quietness
Of my mouth.
Don't look away.
I'll lose you if you look away.
Think of me
As a mouth with a mind'
A thinker with
Lips to invite you in.
With this,
You will come
And stay.
But let your eyes fall,
And I'll lose you forever.
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Comment by: - 2007-09-06 13:44
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It is hard not to look away from this poem.or miss this poem
.it is very seductive ..but
I almost think the power of it is how it is so flirtatious in such a subtle way almost like a courtship this poem..courting the listener
I enjoyed it
I think it is amazing work and had fun reading it I am sure your male fans did too! but it is a universal poem for all.. |
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| Oh how many a man may so powerfully desire. How delightful to be mesmerized and taken in by such an inviting beauty only to discover what truly is "...a thinker with lips to invite you in"; min this case words so inviting. So it is to me that she skillfully lures through what nature provides and then reveals her noble agenda of seeking respect for her intellect. I am pleased by your offering, and it is always pleasure that I seek. Thank you. |
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And if I LIFT my eyes to your eyes?
People that study your mouth are only a step above people that stare at your breasts.
None-the-less, a fully delightful poem. One that reads well. One that succeeds in casting a (siren's) net for sailors of the salty word ...er, world.
Fully delightful. Fully unafraid. |
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| This such a rich piece. Naturally, a total seduction of the reader, pulling us along like puppies. After all the details ofyour mouth & what your mouth can do, i was happily surprised by the ending: "But let your eyes fall, And Iā??ll lose you forever." Fear. Wow. i also really enjoyed the preceding image: "Lips to invite you in. With this, You will come And stay." Like a house/apartment where we can move indoors & live with you. |
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Drugged by the movement
Of my lips,
loved that line. add me.
car crasher. |
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