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maryannestahl
Maryanne Stahl
United States, Georgia, Thunderbolt

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What's That Smell?

The waiter must have smelled it from the kitchen, because when he came out to the patio he strode directly over to our table.

'What are you doing? Were you smoking a joint? Was that a joint you just put out?'

I looked at him without answering, eyebrows raised in mock innocence, grinning like the absolute idiot I was that night. Nash turned his head away.

'Are you crazy?' the waiter went on. 'You can't do that here.' He stood in his black clothes, looking down at me, chin thrust forward. For some reason I found this stance funny.

'It's not a joke.' He shook his head from side to side. 'Don't try it again.'

I sipped red wine from a glass someone had left on the table. Maybe this guy was the manager.

He walked away. Nash turned back toward me but didn't say anything.

I lifted my hand from the ashtray it covered, picked out what was left of the joint and ate it. When I'd lived poor in the city in the 1970's (it could be done, then), I'd left joints as tips in restaurants.

'Wow,' said Nash. 'It's been a long time since you've been to New York.'

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Up the Staircase Comment by: Up the Staircase - 2008-04-22 12:09
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I love unique little moments like this. It's refreshing to read something different and well crafted. Thanks!
karjon Comment by: karjon - 2007-04-04 14:13
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Hello Maryanne

A great wee story - I could picture the scene quite clearly.

'I sipped red wine from a glass someone had left on the table.' For me, that's the line that really captures the whole mischief making mc - drinking from someone else's glass while smoking a joint in a restaurant, not even eating or buying her own drink. Great stuff.

Cheers

Karen
Rosalie67 Comment by: Rosalie67 - 2007-03-23 18:08
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Great ending! Funny. I'd remove the "It could be done then" in parentheses. I don't think you need it. This is my favorite line:
I sipped red wine from a glass someone had left on the table. It's so great!
babpul Comment by: babpul - 2007-03-18 22:14
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Bahahaha. I loved the last line. It's hard to end a good story on a great note.
William de Rham Comment by: William de Rham - 2007-03-17 13:47
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This was fun! Love the title. Also love how this flash captures the incident. I agree with the comment about "strode." I was thinking "marched" might be a possibility. I wasn't sure about eating the joint. I'm not really familiar with the culture of marijuana. Is that something that's commonplace? Of course I've heard of the ALice B. Toklas brownie, but eating a half-smoked joint?
My only other suggestion would be maybe to add somehting about whwere the restaurant is in New York. If you were to tell us it's in the Village, or right off Union Square around NYU, it might give us a more concrete image about her past, and thus strengthen the imapct of the last line. But like I said, fun story!

I just read it again - the other thing I love about this is that there's always something new to notice, so there's a complexity here that invites the reader to re-read.
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