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CharredQuill
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Australia, Victoria, Warrnambool

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By Dawn's Light - Ch. 1

This story is based around Pirate Islands: The Lost Treasure of Fiji. It's an Australian TV series with the actress Saskia Burmeister playing First Mate Lily.

I loved the show, and decided to do a story about it.


Chapter 1: The Arrival







The smell of the tar from the caulking permeated the old ship with it's hot, bitter scent as the men removed the old cotton between the seams in the wood and replaced it with new strips and pitch to waterproof it. It was a smell that regularly happened on long voyages, as the water pounding upon the slippery deck tended to not lean in favour of anyone when it didn't want to. There was a short bang, and a pot of the bubbling, hot black liquid was sitting at her feet. Getting away from the foul stench and the possibility some might get on her long black boots, the red-headed pirate walked further up the deck towards the bridge. Leaning on the thick wooden railing nwith the bridge abaft and near the door to the captain's quarters, Lily leaned over that little bit further to watch as one of the crew threw the 10lbs lead weight into the water as they went along to test how many fathoms there were.

"On soundings!" came the call.

Very good. Plenty of room to maneuver. Casting her gunmetal eyes downwards as had the man who had called out, she eyeballed both the waves lapping against the side of the ship, as well as the crew.
"Come on! Look alive!" was the cry given to the weary sailors caulking the ship. The boatswain just shook his head and sighed.

"You heard her! Orders from the First Mate! Get to work! I want this all ship shape before we come ashore!"

Lily turned around completely and leaned her hips and hands upon the railing, crossing her ankles as she gave the boatswain a sultry smile. "I don't know what you'd do without me." she gave a short hiccup of a laugh before her momentary glory was broken by the ship lurching and nearly knocking her off her feet. Straightening herself up, she stormed off before anyone could say anything. Standing off to the side, Dougal gave a chuckle and shook his head as Lily wandered into Blackheart's own little office in his quarters, unannounced.

"Are we nearly there yet? I'm sick of waiting." she impatiently asked as the aging, and frankly downright ugly Captain looked up from the map.

"'old on, 'old on. You've been used to this for years. You know damn well it takes a long time to get ta places. So you just be patient. We're nearly there." he pointed at his First Mate, looking up at her from under his dark hat with gold trim.

Giving a grunt of disapproval and impatiency, the maroon-clad buccaneer took out a small dagger from her waist and began tossing it up into the air as she paced back and forth in front of the little round table the Captain was behind. For a while he watched her, but shook his head as he spoke. "Would ye sit down already? You're makin' me seasick." Lily gave a glare, but flopped down, crossing her arms over her chest. Knowing she was about to start some foot tapping, he picked up a bright red apple and held it out. "How about somethin' ta eat then? A nice apple."

Eyeballing him again with the dark-rimmed irises she was so well known for, she used the dagger to impale the unsuspecting fruit so she didn't have to get up to get it. Removing it, she began cutting a slice off at a time, eating it off the knife.

"Land ho!" came the call from the crows nest, a grin breaking out onto Lily's face at hearing the muffled call from outside. Dropping the half eaten apple on his desk, she left him to clean the juice off the maps as she went outside.

"Where away?!" she yelled, unable to see land from her current position. Grabbing onto the man ropes, she headed up the rigging and was soon balancing upon the beams jutting out that held the sails. Stepping out onto the beams of the masthead as they creaked under her, she kept a firm hand upon the sturdy barrel that served as the lookout post.

"To the west."

"Alright. Make the land. Let's see what we can find. Let's hope the Captain has the right coordinates this time." Lily's eye twitched momentarily before she carefully lowered herself down. Wrapping her legs around the thick rope, she left herself slide down quickly until she hit the deck. "Get the netting and boats ready! You two!" she ordered, pointing at a couple of the men that had finished their share of the caulking.

"On soundings!" they were still in deep enough waters as they approached the island. The sails billowed outwards, giving a snap every now before they were finally lowered as they came into shallow waters.

"All hands! Captain on deck!" Dougal yelled as Captain Blackheart came out of his cosy little quarters. The ship soon came to a stop as the sails were taken down and the anchor was dropped into the salty blue sea. Lily eagerly rushed over to the netting where the men could get down into the boat. While a couple scaled down the side of the ship after dropping the row boat down, she then pushed another out of the way to get down first. Dropping into the boat, she sat down so it wouldn't rock too much. Herself, Blackheart, Dougal and a couple of others were in one boat while in another were some more crew members. While everyone was sitting down, she was more than happily standing at the front of the little boat, blocking everyone's view as they heaved the oars and got them onto the shore.

As it approached land, the red-headed second in command jumped into the water, flicking water up and splashing the salty liquid into her face. Wiping it off with the back of her hand, she lowered it again to the jangling of the bangles upon her wrist as she waded ashore. The others did the same and brought the boats in, mooring them with a large wooden stake and rope on the beach.

Finally on land after 6 months of sailing, they looked upon the golden sands, taking in the beauty of the tropical landscape. Birds twittering, the waves crashing upon the beach and leaving a white foam in its wake. They were silent.



"So where's the treasure?"

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carriedale Comment by: carriedale - 2007-06-23 08:23
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You DEFINITELY DO have a talent for writing! If it makes you happy, I don't see anything wrong with "fanfic"...as long as you practice your wonderful talent in other areas as well. Chp 1 is interesting. Very discriptive and captivating. I look forward to reading more. Keep writing.
CharredQuill Comment by: CharredQuill - 2007-04-02 23:56
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I think Fanfiction is just a way to expand on the ideas created by someone else, which is essentially what we are all doing anyway. We have our stories, someone comments about a point, and we may change it accordingly.

Which is essentially what a fanfic is doing. I like fanfics because it gives you these awesome characters to work with and put them in situations that you'd like to see them in. It's like...textual imagination, rather than what is in your head.

Besides, if I didn't write all this down my brain is going to explode, because I love the Pirate Islands series and can't stop thinking about it. =) That way if I get it down as a story, I don't need to worry about it anymore.
Teri Comment by: Teri - 2007-04-02 22:26
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Okay, I've read some of this. I'm going to be honest here.

You have talent, which is currently being wasted. Fanfic is based on other people's ideas, not yours. You need to find your own nitch and way of writing and not depend on this stuff.

Again, I'm being honest - you do have talent, but you're going to waste it if you keep writing other people's stories. You can't publish them or do anything else but stay stagnant and frustrated.

I hope I haven't offended. I can tell you this: fanfic usually makes me NOT read things. I hate it, to be honest- it's just stealing of someone else's ideas, storylines, characters, etc under the guise of being a 'fan'.

But I read yours because I knew you have talent from what I've been told by other members. Please take it onto yourself and get your own storyline. You're wasting your talent.

I hope you know this is meant to help and not hurt or hinder.

Teri xo
CharredQuill Comment by: CharredQuill - 2007-03-23 06:51
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I am actually on the forum of the girl that plays the character of Lily. But people are really picky about it. This is the only fanfiction of Pirate Islands that I've ever seen. Because it's not a well known show (most likely because it's an Aussie one) it essentially doesn't exist.

It's not worth the effort of publishing it. That and fans who like the character to stay how it is would probably get a bit snitchy if it turned into an actual novel. So, I'll keep it as a fanfic. Then people won't have high expectations. =)
Light Comment by: Light - 2007-03-23 06:34
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very interesting 1st chapter . . . hey i can defiently seem this becoming a novel. lol but fist ud pobably hv to get permission from the guys who run the show. dnt want them to sue u!
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