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Alabaster DePlum
Alabaster DePlume
United Kingdom, Manchester

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Solid Ghost

It sees through skulls,
It drinks the bricks,
It talks to giant eels,
When it's not busy doing that
It wonders if it's real,
It's hell-bent,
It's translucent,
Sometimes it's just gross,
You're looking at one hundred percent
Pure solid ghost

It wanders in and we walk out,
It wonders what it is,
It embarrasses its closest friends
'It's not mine, it's his'
Its smiles are made of cardboard and
They come off in the rain,
Do we really have to hear it say 'hello',
Again?

It seems there is life after death!
I propose a toast:
To one hundred percent
Pure solid ghost

What living thing could exude such a vacuous aura?
The beer goes sour, it kills the flowers,
It talks about the past,
Sunshine groans in the arc of its eyes,
I wish it would die,
At last

It doesn't eat
It doesn't sleep
It waits for the day to end,
It hates the night the most,
It can't excrete,
It doesn't want to fuck,
It's no less than one hundred percent
Pure solid ghost

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Alabaster DePlum Comment by: Alabaster DePlum - 2007-03-16 05:41
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You did? Who was it? I've never met a ghost. The idea of ghosts upsets me alot, I find the concept hard to live with, but fascinating at the same time.
This poem for me is actually the portrait of someone in a deep depression. It's as if they're dead. Get on with your life you tedious dead bastard.
hulshizer Comment by: hulshizer - 2007-03-16 04:31
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On the whole, not a very appealing apparition, but this was an interesting poem about him. I enjoyed the read. I met a distant relative of his in a hallway one night.
Alabaster DePlum Comment by: Alabaster DePlum - 2007-03-15 05:29
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Glad you like it! Thanks for the comment too, I need to get better at tidying it up like that, so it scans better etc. Think I'll read up on it a little, learn about meter properly... Cheers indeed!
milner place Comment by: milner place - 2007-03-14 10:13
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That's a whole bunch of fun. Really loved it. Found myself naturally putting in a line break after 'Again' in the 2nd stanza. I also wanted to cut the 'narrow' out in the 4th line of the 3rd - but only because I read it easier without it. But, I guess, you read it fine as it is. Cheers.
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