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PyroPaul
P.S. Valley
United States, MA

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Chained

Holding onto the chains and
Swinging, Swinging.

The chains they hold me close
Their cold a lethal dose
Why am I tethered here?
That answer is what I fear.

Holding onto the chains and
Swinging, swinging.

I can't really make it too far,
I have spent life inside a jar.
I'm so used to all the eventless days,
Just shading my eyes from the suns rays

Holding onto the chains and
Swinging, swinging.

Thinking its time to take a chance,
Imagination begins to dance.
There is so much that I could do.
Perhaps time for something new?


Holding onto the chains and
Singing, singing

My heart is finally free
I can now finally see
My blood begins to pump
It is now time to Jump

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Inkling Comment by: Inkling - 2007-04-04 11:34
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Very well done! You've got good rhythm with this poem. It flows well and is easy to read but to read it aloud makes it even better. Keep up the good work.
Endetris Comment by: Endetris - 2007-03-16 18:43
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you have nice balance and weight to your writing! Kudos!
PANDORA Comment by: PANDORA - 2007-03-14 18:59
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This starts out feeling stuck, alone, hopeless.

Then ends with a ray of hope.

I liked the repetition of

Holding onto the chains and
Swinging, swinging.

---it adds great insight to the piece

Good write*
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