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laffarsmith
Rebecca Laffar-Smith
Australia, Western Australia, Armadale

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Romantic Occlusions

I wonder if you ever were a dreamer
entranced by the wonderment of dreams.
If ever you believed in love eternal,
all encompassing, self-sacrificing streams
of blood and soul and spirit watching on.

You speak with such a cynic disbelief,
contempt for foolish whim, for love-swept wile.
Does any beauty touch your barren heart?
A mother's kiss bring to your lips a smile?
Where went your faith in human kindness?

What little hope you hold keeps you alive
for without love or dreams we cease to be
and my tears fall for you today
that jaded walls are all you'll ever see
encased around your soul, devoid of joy.

Inside you're still a wounded little boy.

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carriedale Comment by: carriedale - 2007-07-26 11:49
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this is very insightful. I hope it served as reminder to those who close themselves off and carry baggage that interferes with living and loving.
abitosunshine Comment by: abitosunshine - 2007-07-11 19:08
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Rebecca, excellent portrayal of a man locked in his own cold world unable to feel the warmth o' the tears shed for him.
Grounded Vertigo Comment by: Grounded Vertigo - 2007-03-15 03:37
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I really enjoyed this poem for its clever structure and style whilst at the same time found it very sad. You very cleverly are able to portray the emotions of both involved in this situation and how the long time hurting of one hurts not only him but the one he loves. I really enjoyed it and look forward to reading more!
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