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I Will Find
How can I expect to find my place?
Possibilities are not finite...
So many positions in the human race,
To find me is my mission in life.
It could take days or months or years,
And we won't know until it comes...
Do not be afraid to shed some tears;
It will be worth the beat of the drums.
When you hear the world call out my name,
You'll rejoice too and ease your mind;
My will seems content and relaxed'a shame,
But I'm always searching to find.
I have a plan, designed to be loose;
Don't be fooled by the present stale...
Laziness and I haven't signed a truce,
And my lifetime dream won't derail.
Just give me my minutes, my hours, my space,
And be confident in this soul;
Because truth be told, I win every race,
And I never land flat'I roll.
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| A good write which can only be read with an open mind. |
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| This poem strikes me as intentionally abstract. One of those pieces that is intentionally vague but directed. Not a problem necessarilly, just interesting. Some of the metaphors I had a hard time giving meaning, but I must say the last lines are awesome. |
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| Nice poem, and I loved your last line. You gave your reader a lot to think about which is about as good a thing as a poem can accomplish. |
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Hey ladies... thank you very much for the comments.
Pandora: I wrote this piece as a message to my girlfriend. I could clarify some things for you, but I feel that some explanations might cross the "personal" line a bit. Of course, by showing the piece here on EditRed I have made it public and seemingly NOT personal, but it still is to me. What I will say is that all of your questions have an answer, and the use of the word "stale" in the 4th stanza was completely intentional. :) This response won't help you much I'm sure--and I apologize--but I'll just leave the piece up to speak to each reader individually and allow every person to find their own meaning in the words. Still, thank you very much for the comment... It's nice to see that other people involve themselves in the work of others and enjoy it. Your level of engagement with this poem is more than appreciated. |
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This was very thoughtful and it made me think - who am I? Good rhyming, and good flow. Bravo!
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