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teengonebad
David Colombini
United States, new jersey, holmdel

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Teardrops

I see the teardrops on your face,
Even though they haven't left your eyes.
I know that you're feeling out of place,
Just hear my pleas, just hear my cries.

I'm asking you to talk to me,
Because that's what friends are for.
All your pain is obvious to me,
So let me help you soothe your sores.

I'll stand in the snow, wait in the rain,
I'll wait for you for days on end.
You may think that I'm insane,
But all I want is to be your friend.

Stop pretending, stop denying,
The fact that you are depressed.
Stop depending, stop relying,
On things that make you stressed.

If you ignore all I've said,
You will just worsen your case.
Of all the many things I dread,
The worst are the teardrops on your face.

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mercymanic Comment by: mercymanic - 2007-11-02 07:25
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I have a friend I feel that way about, more than one actually. The one that torments me most is the one who gave up and walked away. I wish he'd turn up so I could tell him I understand. That I'm still waiting in the rain.

This is one of your best.
SacredV Comment by: SacredV - 2007-09-23 04:22
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Very Sincere and Strongly So....Good Flow and Well Written....Its A Great Thought To Know People Truly Do Care, For So Many In The World, Are Such Pretenders!!

-JLO
Anne Comment by: Anne - 2007-07-06 09:44
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Nice flow and rhyme . Very sweet I like the way the person is trying to help a friend .

Nice work

Anne x
Cherley Comment by: Cherley - 2007-06-12 13:27
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Lovely, what a nice friend. I'm wondering here if you might want to consider: soaked in the rain or something like that? You started the next sentence with wait= Iā??ll stand in the snow, wait in the rain,
sudipal Comment by: sudipal - 2007-06-03 10:43
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This is a great poem. It really shows that you care about the person for whom it is. The only thing is that when I got to the line "Because thatā??s what friends are for", I started singing (probably just me though).
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