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Comment by: DavidHe - 2007-11-30 04:12
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| You wrote the poem very well. I think it is a real symbol of your life. would you please add more smile to your poem if it comes from life? Best wishes. |
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Comment by: sudipal - 2007-04-13 13:02
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| The sad message is very deep and is increased upon by the vivid metaphors. |
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| i love the metaphors you have in this. great poem! |
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| The main piece of writing is a lesson in imagery! I could really see the poem play out in my mind and thought it was really clever how you managed to move so quickly from the flower worshipping the sun to being left alone to die. |
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Comment by: manoj - 2007-03-27 21:06
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Excellent metaphor with exquisite words ...dewy petals, eclipsed by distance,endless questions etc.
But ... but ... but...
I don't agree your view points as expressed in the haiku and other short poem.
Your writing indicates ... fragrance remains ... and personally I believe this.
Take care. |
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