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Comment by: NicFran - 2007-03-29 20:42
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'Encased
You and I
Frosted
Sugared
Laced'
You cause your reader to 'dance' with the voice as they can imagine a snow frenzy of love...the two of you walking becoming one with each other and the frosted colored snow.
In the lines that follow, you flash the reader through the beauty that is winter...what better way then to spend it 'swaddled in bed' as you compare your union to that of snow angels melting under loveā??s heat...luv it--sexy 'white' imagery!!! |
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Comment by: Anne - 2007-03-29 05:37
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Really enjoyed this poem. Snow !!! how I love it. Loved the ending words......................
like flakes on tongue
soft felt
Into each others skin
We melt.
Wonderful!!!!! |
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Comment by: Sophia - 2007-03-29 04:58
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I love the imagery in this it builds up a beautiful picture. The opening lines:
Encased
You and I
Frosted
Sugared
Laced
are particularly good I think, and the ending also works well.Lovely. |
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| This poem makes me want to leave the stagnating heat of the southern US, find a place covered in a blanket of fresh snow that still falls, and find shelter in the warmth of a lover's embrace. Thanks for that, because before I read this, my thoughts lacked any sense of poetry or romance. |
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Wow. Great write.
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