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cristinabejar
cristina bejar-gallardo
Philippines, Baguio City

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Libation

i am no sacred chalice waiting on
an altar for your wine to pour
into me--to define my existence

but an earthen vessel
empty and thirsty under the heat
of the desert sun, for grapes to
ripen and age and then
for me to make their spirit mine

who makes what?
is it the cup that makes the wine or
is it the wine that makes the cup?
or if there were no wine to pour
then does the cup exist in vain?

i know not the answers to these questions--
all i know is that i am empty, until
you shall pour into me.

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cristinabejar Comment by: cristinabejar - 2007-04-28 10:29
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Thank you Ethgar! A toast to the returning artist! Cheers to you!
Ethgar Comment by: Ethgar - 2007-04-28 09:51
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This is wonderful.. I love the way you have taken the chalice as a vessel to be defined by the liquid and changed it to be the active "thirsty vessel" same metaphor changed and turned into a beautiful poem... and the title is appropriate since it mentions what you seek and also defines your poem.
roy Comment by: roy - 2007-04-20 05:42
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I think "who makes what?" doesnt belong to this poem, however the rest is fantastic writing. The inigary is clear and fluency is there. I liek the analogy in this poem that you have used.
Thanks for the read.
Roy
cristinabejar Comment by: cristinabejar - 2007-03-31 03:15
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Thank you so much for the suggestion, dear Milner. You speak and I follow. - Cristina
milner place Comment by: milner place - 2007-03-31 03:09
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Yes, this is lovely, Cristina. I'd be tempted to take the 'i am' off the second stanza - just a thought.
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