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Poem for October
I stepped off the bus and saw evening
In the reflection of the weather:
Autumn cover settled in the rainfall
Collected by pavement stones,
Making me long for days watered down
By the evening spirit;
Thoughts of travelling through Toome
And Randalstown at Christmas,
Streetlight patterns filtered through windows,
Daylight clinging onto the city streets
And battling around stonework and hall gates,
Mixing brightness with celluloid dusk,
Hitting the shoppers and hawkers alike.
October, and the night-time comes over
Like a lover's blanket would be cast,
Given up for shelter.
All I want now is to sleep,
An air of expectancy for rest.
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Comment by: zepol - 2007-09-25 20:58
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| Colin, this is another excellent piece. I agree with the others who have reviewed this poem. You always transition so smoothly. I have placed it in my library. |
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Comment by: Dante - 2007-07-19 15:30
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| You really captured the somber feeling of Autumn, to which I can relate. "Hitting the shoppers and hawkers alike" is my favorite line. There all the same in this picture that you've painted. Thanks again for the sweet read. |
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Comment by: mitra - 2007-05-28 00:08
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| We all stepped off that bus.. that is how well described this is. I like the flow of which you slowly ease into the next image. |
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Lovely, totally captures that moment of FEELING October.
Maybe take out some of the 'and' and 'the' especially in lines 2, 3,6?, 11,12, 13, 14. It loses nothing, and gains something. |
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Comment by: Anne - 2007-04-24 17:28
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Lovely poem Colin. Great imagery. Shoppers, busy streets , the feel of autumn. wonderful !!!
Anne x |
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