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Torn apart
Thy love to an extreme,
lying to one another,
the past of then,
the present of now,
the future of when.
A confusion of the hearts,
contemplating the art of love.
Thou's love for me,
just a passion fashion
or was it real?
Broken hearted for thy love,
lost though never forgotten.
A simple mistake to fall for you.
a fool to believe you loved me.
A fool tis you to swear your love,
though made me believe,
till the very end.
p.s. line w/ passion fashion is a play on words (passing fashion) but since talking about love passion fashion.
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I liked the verse, thanks for the explanation of the passion fashion thing, that threw me of for a second... had that Old English tone to the words...
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Comment by: Dakota - 2007-12-04 11:18
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Like James - I very much enjoyed your words, especially the ones he's high- lighted.
I just went through something with someone, where I loved her totally - but in the end she didn't believe me and questioned my intentions... It was so confusing, so painful, that she should (and probably, still does) think that way. There is nothing I can do.
A friend said to me, don't be greedy, just enjoy whatever time you had.
We are all told the grail is 'forever' - or failure...
Your poem dug up the body and set it lurching into my thoughts again... |
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Dear Amber,
There is something wonderful about this poem, actually many somethings!
"the past of now, the present of now, the future of when..."
This is inspired.
My only question, and it is a small one--I'm not sure if your thys and thous are exactly kosher--same for the 'tis you."
These are minor questions--a beautiful poem.
James |
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I loved the imagery, can I ask did you get any revange?
I did like the line Passion fashion.
Thanks
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