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Some days
Almost all nights after some days
I want to wall myself
From everything
Living and otherwise
On this night
I sit and eat peanuts
Watering my half-dead
Bird's Nest Fern, while
Listening to cars splash through puddles
Of a retreating thunderstorm
And I sometimes question
Like tonight and others before it
How will I face another round of
The everyday
Tomorrow?
There's little dignity to be had
With a drowning monotony
When shackled by the
40-hour workweek
I ponder these thoughts
As I have 500 times before
Wondering why I haven't any beer
To wash away the apathy
Or the nuts
Better off without
I think
As I watch
My poor plant die right before me'¦
Things could always be worse.
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I enjoyed reading this. Sometimes people think nothing can be worse than the situation they are currently in, but they dont know that it can ALWAYS be worse. This is my first time reading someone's work on here, i just joined. Glad it was yours, keep it up. Kudos! Take care.
Hi Jay. Beautifully crafted as I've come to expect from your work. I'm sure all working people felt and feel like this at some point. I most certainly identify. Your poetry grows in leaps and bounds every time I drop by to read.
A tight piece of writing - the first stanza is amazing, especially the first two lines ...it has it's own style. It made me wonder what the poem would be like if you used that style within each stanza, or every second stanza (not that it's necessary). The only suggestion I have is to take out the ellipses at the end of the second last line and use a dash instead.
This is a good commentary on modern life. I confess to the same thoughts once in a while. I like the way you took the familiar and pulled it together for your theme. Your last line ties everything together nicely.
