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playing dollhouse
she loves him
like a child
loves a
dilapidated
doll.
wants to hug off
all his buttons
and smooth away
his seams.
to wash him
with her hands
and dry him
with her breath.
she wants to love him
and love him
'til there's
nothing
left.
she wants
to dress him
when he's dry.
hold him
while she
cries.
grow old
with him laying
by her
side.
she loves him
like a child.
with innocence
and grace.
from a deep,
deep,
beautiful
place.
she loves him
like a child.
which makes her
young and
naive.
for she was
unaware
that dolls
could
just
leave.
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An enjoyable poem. I liked the metaphor, which unfolded well throughout the piece. The imagery is quite pleasing, esp the first stanza with its bittersweet 'she loves him
like a child
loves a
dilapidated
doll.'
Btw, is there a typo with 'wants to hug off
all his buttons' did you mean to say 'tug off'? |
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| Kinda makes me think of the song THE DANCE.. if you know what tomorrow will bring... will you still do what your heart feels? of course.. we live in the moment of our dreams of yesterday... and today we create new dreams that will be our tomorrows... ~ |
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Comment by: ltrain - 2007-05-22 05:55
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| i think this poem brings good points about how we use love in relationships. we minimalize to suit our own needs. |
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| This is a great read. I love how you compare her love for a man to a child's love for a doll, but at the end reveal that a love for a man is not like a love for a doll, in the sense that he may not always stay. The concept of a doll also makes me think that maybe the man doesn't love her back, as dolls can't love back either. Anyway, this provokes a lot of thoughts and I really enjoyed reading it. Great work. |
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