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jkaber
Judy K
United States, ME, Belfast

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The way you push through the world

A small sun shines today, feeble, hard, gray.
Drops of water fall past the window,
no sequence, no pattern, small words melted
from the black face of a roof. I look
beyond to the two blue spruce melded into one.
Trace the way the branches split, then split again.
Remember a black crow standing high up above
limbs still with pockets of snow. Across the stream,
pale, grappling poplars lay claim to space,
struggle toward a small smudge of sky,
stretching toward life the way a man might --
filling a trim tan house with wide sofa, black-edged
mirror, chairs pushed in around a table, a row
of empty shoes lined up behind the closet door.

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ruredernot Comment by: ruredernot - 2007-11-03 08:19
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This poem is astute with great attention paid to detail.
I can recognize a worthy poet in the first four lines.
Here it took me only two. Very well done and a pleasure
to read.
ThiaHarrington Comment by: ThiaHarrington - 2007-08-07 15:12
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I think you've really captured a sense of lonliness and isolation with this piece. Being a fellow downeaster, I really appreciate the visual aspect of this and I love that you've discovered such beauty in otherwise desolate images.

Very nice.
GLWard Comment by: GLWard - 2007-06-05 19:43
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This feels rather lonely and desolate. Of course, winter where you are usually does.

A great, sad little piece.
silkpoet Comment by: silkpoet - 2007-05-02 13:59
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Made me feel a bit sad for the man but beautiful never the less!
Blackbirdsong Comment by: Blackbirdsong - 2007-05-02 11:04
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This is beautiful and evocative. I love how this writing makes me feel the place being described. It's really quite beautiful.
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