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The Circle
One circle -not new; not old-
It is beautiful in it's own way
Not like the sight of waves crashing of the blue sea or
the snow covered mountains
But is still
Beautiful in its own way.
A ring that encloses the secrets
-hidden in the center-
Where our hearts have endured such perplexity
But is still
Beautiful in its own way.
The rush of ectasy is OVERWHELMING
No one said this circle was smooth;
Bumps along its edges
It is life
But is still
Beautiful in its own way.
One circle- not gold nor silver-
Holding together two living species
Where the good and the bad exist
It's your life & my life: together
It is beautiful in its own way.
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| Lovely, incouraging poem |
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| nice lyric smooth i like the rhythm the moving me in to that circle instead on the out........ |
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This, indeed, is 'beautiful in its own way', Melanie, and the repetitions suit the subject so well - the circularity. Spotted a few typos; 'it's' should not have the apostrophe except when meaning 'it is' ('it's your life' - OK, 'it's own way, it's edges' - not OK). Line 3, 2nd stanza, I think you need a 'd' on the 'endure' - 'endured' (or take the 'have' out). Last verse, it should be 'exist' - not 'exsist'. Much enjoyed
Milner |
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