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I hate to see you cry
Though I'm not your guy
I do a little for you
Put some cheer in your
Ear
'cause it's all I can do
A triumph of sprit over
Adversity
Is distance rendered
You seem suspended
In private thought
I wonder what ideas
You court
I can tell a lie
But it takes effort to tell it
If you don't know I can spell it
E V E R Y T H I N G I S F I NE
But still'¦
I hate to see you cry
Though I'm not your guy
I do a little for you
Put some cheer in your
Ear
'cause it's all I can do
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This is bloody good. It's got that whole bitter-sweet lyrical thing going on, and it's easy to relate to (having been on both sides of the situation you describe).
This poem illustrates very well the difficulty of being in that position "the shoulder to cry on". I particularly like the third stanza because of it's stark honesty. That is the hardest lie to tell.
I enjoyed the first two stanzas, but this poem seemed to wander off after that. I would suggest that you drop the last stanza, and rework the third one for a stronger finish. Just a suggestion.
