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edensapple
Michelle Rizzi
United States, CA, Campbell

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genesis

he came from the penny arcade
a flash of text
and cryptic wit;

glorifications of
my innocence
illuminated like
orange marmalade,
hitting so hard
he struck oil.

now look at the mess
we've made.

my hands are soiled
from cherry lozenges
and bloodstains;

but he tasted like
holy water,
i prayed after
each drop.

thanked god
for drowning into
this poison man
with diamonds in his mouth.

they said he'd leave me empty,
just like the grave
i dug myself.

he did his best to hide the shovels,
painted all the sweet
and sour,
and never ever led me on.

against the crowd
i walked into my heartache
knowingly,
proudly,
with absolutely
no
regret;

this screaming
hollow spot
inside my chest
my only debt.

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Up the Staircase Comment by: Up the Staircase - 2008-04-05 15:18
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Your descriptions and style are refreshing. A lot of poets on this site have the same old style and use the same old tired metaphors...not the case with you. I really enjoyed this poem. Thanks for that.
queenbeekiller Comment by: queenbeekiller - 2007-11-27 14:00
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Very good poem, and a lot of emotion shines through too.
badwolf Comment by: badwolf - 2007-06-29 17:36
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this is a nice description of the whole "it is what it is" thing.
star romancer Comment by: star romancer - 2007-04-27 14:22
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This was a really good poem. Powefull and cryptically leveled. My favorite part was but
he tasted like
holy water,
i prayed after
each drop.

Very well written. True poetry is presented here.
hornedtoad Comment by: hornedtoad - 2007-04-26 10:03
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Wow... "drowning in this poison man" ... a baptism into something new and in hindsight unholy. Innocent is right... each line is a solid block, and I love that...
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