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Promises - Re-Revised
Look now,
Watch as the cruel circles spread
Ever widening,
Devouring our children in their wake
See them?
Their promises are in neat little packages
Wrapped in gaudy boxes
Resplendent in tinsel and bows
Watch
The children's hearts swell
Softly, like willow-buds.
Begging still for more
Come near
See the little ones destroy the gaudy tinsel
And gleefully rip away the bows
To expose the plastic promises
Listen,
They have been devoured
You have been seduced
By the circles professional pleas
Stand away
As dreams are thrown into corners,
Promises become yesterday,
And cobwebs replace the tinsel
Until it all fades away.
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This poem reminds me of Christmas morning when all the tinsel and everything is all over the floors, half the toys are already broken, the rest haven't been played with, and the child is sitting around disappointed because nothing in those boxes could really ever make them happy.
The circling; perhaps those all the ads circling around the young ones telling that happiness comes in a box. Children are the easiest prey for that kind of thinking. Sadly too are some adults. |
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Comment by: zepol - 2007-05-20 13:26
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| Dennis, nicely done. Thanks for turning me on to your poem. It is splendid. |
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| I like this message. The poem is really smooth and nothing seems out of place to me. I can tell you worked on polishing this up. The rhythm is concrete and the poem reads easily. |
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| Rabableo, you nailed it girl. Years ago, shortly after Christmas, I visited my six year old granddaughter. I found most of the toys I'd bought her thrown in a corner or in a closet, forgotten. I'd spent over a hundred dollars on her presents. That's when this poem came to me. |
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Comment by: rabableo Online- 2007-05-16 10:57
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"Willow-buds" and "children's herarts" beautiful!
Ok, the promises are those made by the "cruel circles" right?
"By the circles(') professional pleas" So this means adverts maybe? Or if I take the circles to mean the never ending circles of life that suck us in as we get older, so this means the promises of a bright future etc etc which aren't true?
I dont know if my interpretation is right or not or even near right, BUT...I liked the images and the words.
I enjoyed reading this, thanks for the brain-wracking class! :) |
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