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Bloowriter
eneida estrella
United States, new jersey, leonardo

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Still

I'm trying, it seems

to write

to keep a thousand journals at once

I want to write you see

about something, anything, everything

nothing

and I do

And still, I feel I don't say enough

The words are essential

to keeping my spirit alive

with great illusion I choose my words

extracating them as needles from a haystack

lost thoughts become errors on the page

And still I feel I don't

say enough

The outward expressions of my body

become words

expressed with lyrical abandon

I think

And still I feel

I never say enough

The cold wind bruises my mind

I slip through my thoughts

skidding on them in the dark

clinging to ellusive phrases

creating false hope for a beautiful creation

that will captivate the mind

And which will still

never say enough.

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JayB Comment by: JayB - 2007-06-08 21:30
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yes...my favorite line was also "the cold wind bruises my mind". I am constantly stuck on the 'is this good enough...is this true enough...is there more i can say' i think this maybe one of my favorites so far. very talented...keep it up
fakeplastic Comment by: fakeplastic - 2007-04-17 17:19
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This poem resonates well with me (and probably any other writer). I especially like the line "the cold wind bruises my mind", which creates such a complex and impossible image.

I'm not sure what you mean by "with great illusion I choose my words"... is this supposed to suggest a level of difficulty?

Overall, I think this piece successfully articulates the paradoxical challenge and allure of words.
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