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sarahxriotx
Sarah Lahman
United States, Maryland, i can't say....

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cheater

I have never been one to cheat, until that cold and rainy night. DJ called me on my cellphone, told me that I need to come over because he was feeling down. Something had happened that weekend and he said that he couldn't take the stress and the people at school. He said that some girl said she was interested in him, but then went off and started dating another guy.

So I did. We talked. I did most of the talking. Trying to figure out what had him SO stressed. We drank coffee and smoked Marlboro Menthol cigarettes. God, how I love those. He didn't seem to budge. I knew that my presence made him feel better, but he looked so tense. So I gave him a back massage, which seemed to do the trick. But he still wouldn't talk about it. See, DJ is the kind of person who will say something is wrong, but won't talk about it or show his true feelings. He only told me bits and pieces, and in an almost in coherent mumbling voice.

After, we watched a movie corny enough, we watched American Pie 2 because all of his good movies weren't with him at the dorms. I don't know what came over me that night, I don't know if it was that fact that he looked so good, or the cologne he was wearing, or the fact that he confided in me and only me.

I cheated! I am a cheater! I did what I swear I'd never do! I cheated on Jayson. Although Jayson and I have only been together for about two months, I've known DJ the whole semester.
I felt so bad. I wanted to cry. I wanted to tell Jayson everything that I did. That the way how he kisses is great, and that the sex was even better. And that it felt so nice. The funny thing is, DJ and I are just friends. I had never slept with him before.
It just kind of happened.

But I know, if I was to do such a thing, he would break my heart and leave me, because I broke his. Maybe they should start a Cheaters Anonymous program. I'd be the first in line. "Hi, my name is Sarah, and I'm a cheater." Why did I even start? I don't know. I guess I learned the trick of the trade, from the ones who cheated on me. This was my first and last time.

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Darren Comment by: Darren - 2008-08-14 07:46
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The way this is written, I speculated that the girl DJ might have been talking about was you. From the ending, I don't believe this was the case, but that could be an excellent twist if you wanted to make this fiction.
ravenshadowwinds Comment by: ravenshadowwinds - 2007-11-23 20:20
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This has great potential. It does read like a diary, but at the same time...I would like to have seen much more descriptive and emotive language used to get further inside your head. I would like to have seen it more as you looking back on yourself "in the moment" with a discription of his cologne and how it made you feel, etc.
Penned Down Comment by: Penned Down - 2007-08-13 20:24
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This feels very much like a diary entry to me, is this what you were going for? I like the flow of everything but I feel that you need to develop it further to bring it more into the story realm.
star romancer Comment by: star romancer - 2007-06-25 08:36
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reading this I felt like I was reading a diary... in a good way, instead of focussing on the theme of actions that lead to the cheating, you skip straight from introduction to guilt, I think this was the point, not the details of what happened. Its a good wright, I like the last paragraph... "a Cheaters Anonymous program" HA! how lovely.
QueenMoniqwa Comment by: QueenMoniqwa - 2007-05-07 08:35
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I feel this is a beginning. What a great theme. I love it as is...compelling me to reach for empathy. Especially since the experience was 'better'.
I would love it more if you gave me more of the 'struggle'...how do you kiss again without remembering the heat of those other lips? How do you watch him speak knowing what he did with that mouth? Those beautiful shudders of regret...shock...the 'omygod' of the memories of the night before the morning after; that's always the sweetest agony.

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