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Temporal
Leaning upon the newel
I followed you down circular
Out into the square
There was a burst of birds
A quickening of step
A nuance of eternal chances
and the surety of rain.
I saw a man near a statue
Steam pounced from his face
Up and out against the Azure
He had a paper, and it had him
There was a clock looming
And shadows curling through vista
The river, black, snaked in daylight.
You were singing of Summer
You were barely chest high
A basket of fresh bread hooked
from your arm, rubbed at your side
Top buttons open, periwinkle dress -
- cascading about your pale ankles
You smelled of Vanilla and morning.
I stayed behind you 'till the bridge
And that is where I let you go.
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Well it's lucky the poem you have posted here is actually very good - or i would have posted a snotty reply out of point of principle.
'A nuance of eternal chances
and the surety of rain.' is very beautiful.
to be honest, the poem of mine you commented apon is not really my cup of tea ether - it is more 'formal' and less abstract than other things i have written. and besides, you can't please all the people all the time - as a greater mind than mine once said.
perhaps you would be so kind as to peruse some of my other offering?
stay with crist, bra |
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