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edensapple
Michelle Rizzi
United States, CA, Campbell

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ex

tonight you were one of those phone calls.
the kind that command.
the kind that plead.

once the eye of a storm
that long since has forgotten
about you.

your vapor trail has always been
limited,
now it is you who come
to me.

and i press the button
again and again
bantering with my common sense
over pints of
stolen whiskey.

what if it's true
what if it's real
what if i could get lost
and melt
again?

my mind runs rampant,
remembering ricochet eyes
and floundering nightspells.

i will go through my room
lingering over photos of
our youth,
i will cover myself with
that fragrance
you always loved
that smelled like raspberries
and cream.

i will relive our private jokes
and sufferances,
but i will not return your call,
because when you are young
you are naive enough to hope
for something that will never happen,
and when you are older,
you know better.

tonight i drank half a bottle of scotch,
and dialed the
first six
numbers.

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jjsmith Comment by: jjsmith - 2007-08-15 04:44
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very cool
love the wild thoughts
ranging from the lost storm
through the possibilities of living it again
ending in dialling those first six numbers
like dot dot dot dot dot dot
almost a morse code
for sos
badwolf Comment by: badwolf - 2007-06-29 17:33
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how well i remember drunken phone calls at three in the morning. great poem. it captures what i like to call the 49/51s. that's where 51% of you knows that something is wrong even though 49% of you is trying to be convinced the opposite is true.
samuelzane Comment by: samuelzane - 2007-04-30 00:56
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I really like this! I love the poem's content, how the speaker (you presumably?) is SO against calling the ex- but, at the end of the poem, kinda decides to call- but then changes and stops at six numbers... you leave the reader questioning whether the last number got dialed :). So, not only is the "speaker" of the poem undecided, sorta- so are the readers! This is really a great poem!
counterculture Comment by: counterculture - 2007-04-29 10:52
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"i will relive our private jokes
and sufferances,
but i will not return your call,
because when you are young
you are naive enough to hope
for something that will never happen,
and when you are older,
you know better."

You are a wise person. That stanza really speaks.
hornedtoad Comment by: hornedtoad - 2007-04-26 09:44
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my mind runs rampant,
remembering ricochet eyes
and floundering nightspells.

that is such a great fucking stanza! damn.... kick me in the gut again! I apologize to my life for the times I was needy!
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