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devoice
wayne hall
United States, texas, canyon

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Dedication To a hero wronged

Dedication
What do you do if you feel that you have no powers?
you can only sit at home and helplessly watch the fall and destruction of the towers
If you can not destroy the wrong but rather use it to do the right
to save a drop of blood, or pool of tears, and avoid another needless sacrifice
to furnish new tennants or old occupants to the homes where humans dwell
and not replenish the halls of heaven or fill the pits of hell
can you use the weapons and tactics of wrong to right its direction?
If the work performed was seen as wrong but it saved lives would you have objection?
The deviousness of man planned genocide and annihilation
To seal a wound with a angry hand
and a vengeful sword of devastation
This was made more deadly since there was no cause
Just a foolish idea backed by its own fantasized and imperfect laws
Death manipulated, plotted, guided, and in short controlled
Freedom could be bought for one price but for a little bit more resold
Nothing was worth nothing and no one escaped the grasp
Even those that who knew not of snakes have fell victims to the asp
The evil of mankind's heart can make the taste of death to be bitter or sour
But when there is idea of profit weaknesses becomes his greatest power
The idea of an externalized power dowses power that is internal
Man begins to respect not the GOD above because he can only promise the eternal
Many died for the profit of another and all were enslaved due to fear
But for every one forced to leave this world at the tip of a whip or barrel of a gun They will regret far beyond the rising of the moon and the setting of the sun.
A list of life in the midst of evil; using its wrong to create a right
And when the fires were dowsed the 'wronged hero' thought it best that he take flight.
The society he lived in had a most evil and diabolical notion
The human ash fell like snow and created a river of blood that filled the ocean.
Why does man want to be right all the time even when there is evil intent?
Is it that he wants sole ownership of our tiny corner of the universe; get serious! we don't even pay rent?
GOD no longer had a say, as far as they were concerned; he was only a spectator
Evil eradicated while GOD sat idly by passing his immortal power to a mortal dictator.
When the wicked create rivers of blood that litter the fields with bodies instead of sand
Can any excuse be formed that could pardon the merciless act of the unworthy hand?
When GOD'S wrath destroys the evil in the world but man's fist destroys all within his path.
GOD allows chances exceeding the patience of man man allows chance of a bloodbath.
The crimes against nature, against a people, not part but the whole of humanity
Just proves we have barely begun to crawl on the path out of the waters of insanity.
Back to our hero,
Does it really make a difference who pulls you out of the fire
Or who endangers their life and freedom just so a stranger doesn't expire?
Man is the only creature that can make pestilence and poverty change for the better
He also has the power to enhance it to use it as an umbilical or tether.
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devoice Comment by: devoice - 2007-04-23 07:56
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Thanks many people have told me I sound like I am "preachy" and I also do public readings. I am not good at punctution either plus wrote it in word so I probably shouldn't copy and paste it never transfers witthe same format. This is actually about one of the unsung heroes of the holocaust. I appreciate the comment and I will check back later I am in the midst of fional exams
devoice Comment by: devoice - 2007-04-23 07:56
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Thanks many people have told me I sound like I am "preachy" and I also do public readings. I am not good at punctution either plus wrote it in word so I probably shouldn't copy and paste it never transfers witthe same format. This is actually about one of the unsung heroes of the holocaust. I appreciate the comment and I will check back later I am in the midst of fional exams
Comment by: - 2007-04-23 02:49
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Not the easiest story to read. I'm not sure if that is because of the content or the range of grammar used.

It reminds me of something a preacher would read out, or even shout out. He would have a mid American accent and use the words hell fire a lot.

If you did nothing else you could maybe read the work out loud and then that would give you a clearer idea where to put in some extra punctuation (something I'm not great at), it just makes your work easier to read.
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