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A CRUEL MISUNDERSTANDING
"You remember that girl you saw me with this weekend at the bistro?" asks Marcello while rubbing and breathing out on the window of his Movado wristwatch.
"She was hot," I say.
"Yes. She reminds me of a blonde Monica Bellucci. I had to let her go that night, though."
"Why? What happened?"
"I told her that I used to have a girlfriend who was a thespian, and how much we enjoyed traveling and staying at hotels and locking ourselves up to have wild sex."
"What? Did she get retroactively jealous?"
"Worse. She said, 'So, if your girlfriend had sex with you then she actually was bi, wasn't she?' "
"Ouch."
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| Good, but I didn't laugh this time. Just smiled. |
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| Good. Definitely got a chuckle out of it. Nice brief story. |
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| A great punch at the end! Cute story. |
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Comment by: Juan2 - 2007-04-25 23:31
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This one made me smile. You've got a great sense for misdirection because the whole Thespian/Lesbian joke has been done before, but I for one didn't see it coming here. The dialogue is top-notch, noticed that in "Memories of Bonnie" too, but you keep it going here. Feels very natural, really like it when dialogue can carry a piece the way it does here. It is short and sweet, this story. A humorous little read.
Happy Writings. |
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Comment by: Teri - 2007-04-23 20:49
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Hahaha! Great one. I enjoy these little pieces of flash with the funny endings, and this is no exception. Thanks for the very funny read.
Teri |
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