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nurseytonya
Tonya Lambert Bryant
United States

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You Belong to Me

You Belong to Me

Once there was a young girl, a girl of eight or nine,

Who walked into a toy store looking for a toy so fine;

She looked all around, at all the games and dolls,

But there was nothing right for her, nothing right at all;

Then she saw this one toy, it really caught her eye,

It was very beautiful, and on a shelf so high;

"Some day I will buy you," she said. "Some day, you will see!"

"Some day I will buy you, and you'll belong to me."

She went back to the toy store, she went there every day,

And every time she went there, she would always say:

"Some day I will buy you. Some day, you will see!"

"Some day I will buy you and you'll belong to me."

Once again she went back to the grand toy store,

But she found that things weren't like they were before;

There was another young girl, a girl of eight or nine,

Holding her dear toy, and standing in the line!

"But, this isn't fair!" she said. "I came here every day!"

Then she heard the other girl as she began to say:

"I told you that I'd buy you. I told you that you'd see."

"I told you that I'd buy you. Now you belong to me."

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nurseytonya Comment by: nurseytonya - 2007-07-05 05:17
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Thanks Kevin! : )
haha, yes I love Little House on the Praire,
and can't stand Nellie the blonde! lol
Comment by: - 2007-07-05 04:07
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This gets better every time I read it, Tonya.
The girl, at the start, reminds me of Laura Ingalls - and the other girl at the end reminds me of her nasty enemy, the wee spoilt blonde girl.

But, this isn't fair!" she said. "I came here every day!"
Then she heard the other girl as she began to say:
"I told you that I'd buy you. I told you that you'd see."
"I told you that I'd buy you. Now you belong to me."

LOL. Great stuff.
nurseytonya Comment by: nurseytonya - 2007-07-03 18:38
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sorry, I think it defaulted to short story, and I didn't realize I hadn't changed it. will have to figure out how to fix that, still getting used to the format here. That one line has always given me trouble, but i don't know what to do with it. I've had a few people tell me they didn't like rhyming poetry but liked this. I suppose because it tells a story. I'm rather proud of this piece as I wrote it when I was 17 for a class and my teacher put it on the overhead to show everyone as an example. : )
Comment by: - 2007-06-29 13:09
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You had this listed as 'short story', so I was surprised to find a poem. I'm not a fan of rhyming poetry, but this flows along nicely.
It might look more like a poem if you presented it in four-line stanzas.
The eighth line from the end,'...once again she went to the grand toy store...' seemed to fall out of meter, and lost the pace.
Good work.
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