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denisedee
denise dee
United States, AZ, Flagstaff

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The Wedding

I have come to Cleveland to wed
it is winter and wild white snow
falls on my coat
my teeth chatter
my dead father floats
down the river
towards the furnace of the
steel mill
His bones will
become a car, a bed frame,
for someone else
who might right now
be looking out their window

I try to read the signs
but I have no one to talk to
as I walk Literary, Professor, College streets
I see black telephone wires
crisscross the sky
from Pittsburgh to San Francisco
to Cleveland
I have come to wed
the band will play polkas

My father smiled as he said
I will dance on your grave
to those he disliked
bitter seeped through the cracks
like salt on Pittsburghs sidewalks
he will not walk down the aisle
to give me away
he gave me away at birth
to the fairies, to the muse, to the story
to the silence

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JewelMartin Comment by: JewelMartin - 2008-02-12 20:57
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I loved your father dancing on the grave as well as the imagery of the steel mill and bedframes. This read very well and had a nice beat to it as another poster said. Thank you for the nice read. Jewel
henzy Comment by: henzy - 2008-02-10 13:40
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an overall good read but it was the first stanza where you write of your father floating over the river while he becomes a car or bedframe to the people looking out of their windows. the imagery was so sad yet made me smile.
crackednotbroken Comment by: crackednotbroken - 2008-02-06 18:53
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I like the sort of freestyle you use and the way you capitalize every so often. A nice pace setter. I, for some reason, do that too! I did notice though, that you didn't here; he will not walk down the aisle
Anyway, I'm also a sucker for the somber. Very nice job.
JoanneMitch37 Comment by: JoanneMitch37 - 2008-01-29 06:39
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very interesting - it has a great beat...
JM
nasrwriting Comment by: nasrwriting - 2008-01-21 02:48
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I love the fine detail you have put into your piece. As one reads on an illustration is drawn in the mind of the reader. It’s more than just a story, it is a piece that has grand impact on the real reader. You really have talent, keep up the excellent work.
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