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MaRiAh EsTeP
mariah estep
United States, kansas, nickerson

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untitled.

i am running. i don't know what i'm running from until i see something.
i set my eye on what seems to be a glimpse of light. headlights? streetlights? a town ahead? what is the light? should i follow it? or should i just stop right here? maybe i can seek help by this sight of life. hopefully i can figure out something.

the next thing i know, i'm wearing what seems to look like a white gown, long and beautiful. my hair is blowing, but not everywhere. a calm breeze that made my hair like waves in the ocean. now i ask myself again? where am i? why am i here? did i do something wrong? why have i stopped running?

suddenly a voice calls me. "you are in heaven, my dear child. you have been the person i have called to be a guardian angel. can you do this for me, my child?"

i look up, and say,"sir, i don't know you that well, but i would love to be an angel for you. but why am i here?"

"only you can answer that question, my dear angel" the unknown spirit said, "i haven't an answer for you. that is why you must go to back to earth and tell people of me."

i am still confused. "but WHO ARE YOU, sir?" it was silent for what seemed like hours, but was only a couple seconds. "i've heard about you, but have never caught your name?"

the voice was silent. i fall to the ground, and start crying.

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DavidHe Comment by: DavidHe Online- 2007-12-29 19:43
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A very good story! Would you please consider the word "back" in the sentence "that is why you must go to back to earth and tell people of me"? Best wishes.
brad19 Comment by: brad19 - 2007-06-23 18:48
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I loved it, it was different, short and sweet and had its own unique style. You're a great writer, it was great reading.
CoUrTnEyLyNn Comment by: CoUrTnEyLyNn - 2007-05-23 08:36
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Very good. Write Mariah. Im with Bennie Poo. Ad some more too it.
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skatadude93 Comment by: skatadude93 - 2007-05-02 19:04
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thats great thats a good write i dont know what u need to add to it it needs touchinmg becuase well its great but it can be better if you work on it...
Comment by: - 2007-05-02 15:18
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Very good story. To make it better, I suggest your character(you?) is extremely reluctant to accept the task of guardian angel. It is no doubt a daunting responsibility, and most of us would be petrified to screw it up.
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