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Lance W Toohey
Lance Toohey
Australia, Queensland, Cairns

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THE LIGHT OF MY SOUL

Come take a journey, a journey with me
Come see the world as I,
Enter mine eyes, my heart my soul
Come, let us soar upon high.

Through mine eyes, can you see her as I
Her glory encompasses all,
Look to the beauty that dwells in her soul
Her eyes and her smile enthrall.

Walk with me as waves kiss the shore
Can you feel the touch of her hand,
Give yourself over to love's sweet lament
Let no footprints be cast 'pon the sand.

Feel the beat of a heart born to love
Can you feel this ardour as I,
Every beat be an elysian dream
Each moment a gift from on High.

Now you have seen the world as I
'Tis she who makes me whole,
For she is my world, she is my life
She is the light of my soul.

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symonnetorpy Comment by: symonnetorpy - 2007-05-02 23:13
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be aware of some uneven phrase lengths. play around with syllabic conventions a little more. you could use this to greater effect. i like the way you try and take the reader on a journey. usually that is inferred through the rhythm of the piece, but it has a power and a light to it which i like a lot.
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