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At What Price Honor
A man can give his word,
while not roundly
being fashionable, but
being honorable is not
always synonymous
with being popular.
Strength of honor
is the very essence
of a man's being, but
could his word be
weighed by the
vastness of wealth?
Said to a friend,
'Once given, a man
is duty bound
to keep his word,
regardless the price!'
Looked me in the eye,
and replied, 'That depends'.
I never again beheld
my closest comrade
in the same golden light.
Could it be that, the more
abundant the affluence,
the weaker the knees?
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| I like it - a lot. So true. Just a suggestion, the two stanzas that start, "Strength of honor . . ." and "could his word be . . ." seem like they should be connected. Is the space there for a reason? Poetic license allows you to do whatever, but the thoughts are so connected that I think it would read as well or better if the extra line between were removed. Like I said, just a suggestion. Good luck on the book, too. |
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Love the repetition of "being" in the first stanza. I love repetition as a tool, and it worked really well for you, especially because you varied where "being" appeared in each line. It flows really well, sounds great, and captured my attention immediately.
Love the internal rhymes. The poem was paced perfectly, and you held my attention until the very end. There is nothing I can say to improve or change. Except maybe your usage of the exclamation point in your fourth stanza. It seems superfolous to me, but I just have a thing against exclamation points, so you can ignore me.
Overall, brilliant and flawless poem. I am rediculously impressed. |
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Hi Ronald,
Ahhh...the days of the handshake, - and that was good enough for trust between friends...sadly that does not often happen any longer. Great prose, - thanks!
Susan |
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Comment by: PANDORA - 2007-11-03 17:38
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As always, a piece with a view of morals which either makes the reader say "what!?" or challenge their own way of thinking. You do not write as often as others for good reason. You are a man who only says what needs to be said. You do not write just to have words on paper.
I really do think most of us start out with our "ideals" but so many different factors twist what was once an honest start and jade our view of the world.
There are still a few who stand by what they were and are no matter where life leads them.
It seems that I always get a little more, or should I say less ignorant when I read one of your pieces. Your point of view of the way people and the world works are very grounded. I only hope others see what I see.
Sheri |
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Comment by: sarra - 2007-10-31 19:32
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| very thought provoking, especially the question at the end. I actually read it twice and enjoyed every last word. Well written and well thought out. |
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