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rupertdepaula
rupert de paula
United Kingdom, London

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Living For My Hole

Underneath the railway bridge,
Covered with multi-coloured tags,
(the pseudonyms of anarchic artists)
Between the bottles, the cans and bare patches of dirt,
Lives another sort of debris,
That live only for their hole.

Signposts point to the railway tracks,
Motorways choke the wilderness with carbon monoxide,
And in the cities: MSG cafes crowd streets,
The sewers are inverted,
The human race misguided,
We only listen to our vanities.

It's a nice day, picnics in the park,
Homemade lunches with friends in the sun,
Escapism from reality,
Pause for thoughts and contemplations,
Free from trials and tribulations,
Ignorance, our greatest of virtues,
Out of sight equals out of mind.

Watch them copulate on sweaty dance-floors,
Like cattle herded, there is no dignity in their revelry,
I view from outside the mirror,
Intoxicating myself to dull the pain,
Perhaps I am the debris, not them?
Because I only live to fill my hole.

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safi Comment by: safi - 2008-07-12 19:08
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This poem has some pretty heavy imagery.

Nice.
zepol Comment by: zepol - 2007-10-03 21:29
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I read the poem twice and the second time was best. The third stanza is exactly what new world poetry is all about. Making a statement is one of the most important facets of modern poetry. Open and free statements such as yours should be applauded. Thank you
spilth Comment by: spilth - 2007-06-02 06:06
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I recently thought to myself..."if everything else smells like shit, it might be you"...but nice concepts and images...although a bit empty, like the locus of control is soley external. will read the next.
diagonal Comment by: diagonal - 2007-05-19 17:12
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It was almost painful to view the images in my mind and relate to the hole in my fractured framework. Your writing is essential and it speaks to me with a punch on signposts and alley walls. I am a mirror of the ugly greyness I wish to color and cultivate into a whole collective web of worldly wiseness. Peace. Punkfairydoll
nonalienabductee Comment by: nonalienabductee - 2007-05-08 08:06
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I liked this, I enjoyed the different images that you proposed and the intriguing theme of "living for my hole," but I think the third stanza is too obvious. I've never been a fan of poems that employ sledgehammers for their cause, and that stanza is suspiciously hammer-like. Not to mention that it doesn't seem to flow very well with the rest of the poem.

Quite liked

"Covered with multi-coloured tags,
(the pseudonyms of anarchic artists)"

Oh, and "dibre" in the next to last line--is that meant to be debris?
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