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lost angel
Tessa Maree Farrow
Australia, QLD, Coolangatta

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Cry alone

Listening to the sound of my heartache,
These painful feelings I can't shake,
Thinking that true love is fake,
With the tears from my eyes that flow,
The pain of love is all that I know,
And nothing else has been shown,
Down into hell my heart has been thrown,
Always being left to cry alone,
Every time that you return,
This lesson in life I will never learn,
Believing every word that is said,
But every time it leads only to my bed,
This is the part that I dread,
Knowing this is all I'm worth to you,
But not knowing what else I can do.

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lospoemas Comment by: lospoemas - 2007-11-25 16:54
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I like how it doesn't say that all the voice meant to this person was sex (I assume that's what you mean), but you say it in a subtle way that allows the reader to figure it out. I am working on doing this kind of thing more often in my stuff. This is the first poem I have ever read from you, and if I may critique a little, I felt the rhyme was a little forced. I don't know if you always use rhyme, but I think this could be as strong or stronger without it.
mitra Comment by: mitra - 2006-11-25 21:15
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Break the cycle!
Comment by: - 2006-01-20 06:09
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this poem is very good you have a way with words. i like it!
Comment by: - 2006-01-16 17:06
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Also a well written poem.

Don
popeye Comment by: popeye - 2006-01-16 14:59
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owwww, another brillant poem Tessy. your poetry keeps getting better and better. you have a way of connecting with your readers. i like this line especially from your poetry. "Down into hell my heart has been thrown". just beauful, heart felt poem
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