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You Speak To Me
You speak to me like whispers
Gently blowing in my ear
You speak to me so deep it's
As though you where here
You Speak to me so tender
I dare not say a word
I have to be sure of what I heard
You speak to me so gentle
Each word holding me tight
I can feel you in the night
You speak to me so sweetly
My hearts in such a whirl
You speak to me so bold
You really rock my world
Your softness your tenderness is
So bright I feel you I feel you with
all my might keep touching me
Keep caressing me keep holding me
Tight
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Comment by: Afrka - 2007-12-06 17:48
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| Very powerful and imaginative write. I can totally relate to this write. Love your style. Stay blessed! |
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Comment by: yinka - 2007-11-13 04:42
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| nice poem...wud like u all to check out my poems 2.try adding some life intoyour poems. |
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Comment by: Dreque - 2007-07-12 14:06
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Yes you feel stumbles because it's a poem from one who is expressing how they feel nervously rememeber when you were young, your first love? Remember how your words stumbled? Words do touch Thunderpen remember? Thank you for all of this feedback it does me good and will make me greater. I loke you thunderpen
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Once again, I think I could grok this poem better if I heard it. I like the form, but the rhythm, I feel, stumbles here and there. Like the line "I have to be sure of what I heard" is a bit long compared to the foregoing. I want to be carried along, not smashed into a rock.
But, woman, it's sweet. I think the poem should be more like the speaking/lovin' of which you are writing.
Seems to go from words to touch. |
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