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seadogz
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United States, Florida, Jacksonville

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The Mirror

The Mirror

We can't see the Mirror we can only see ourselves/
Trapped between our Heavens and stuck between our Hells/

We can't see the Mirror we can only see our skin/
Falsely loved by enemy, quietly hated by friend/

We can't see the Mirror we can only see our flaws/
Covered in make-up, hiding our beautiful scars/

We can't see the Mirror we can only see our dreams/
"I want to be special! I want to do amazing things!"/

We can't see the Mirror we can only see our past/
Crying nights fill the towering hour glass/

We can't see the Mirror we can only see our gods/
Our fantasy Idols and Hollywood movie stars/

We can't see the Mirror we can only see our smiles/
Our happiest moments tossed on the fire piles/

We can't see the Mirror we can only see our wrists/
The razor in my hand gives it a sweet kiss/

We can't see the Mirror we can only see our shoes/
Lying on the floor, too much blood do we lose/

We can't see the Mirror we can only see our angels/
Fighting demons in our stead because we are unable/

We can't see the Mirror we can only see our light/
It covers us now, to answer our dark plight/

We can't see the Mirror we can only see our watch/
I could of left this world, but then again I'd rather not/

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michellecoes Comment by: michellecoes - 2007-07-06 11:43
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I love this poem.AWESOME. This spoke to me personally, and not many poems can move me in that way so i say kudos. I love your choice of metaphors and the way you emphasized the rhythm.
poeticheart Comment by: poeticheart - 2007-05-12 00:05
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I really enjoyed reading this poem. The words are true in so many ways.
seadogz Comment by: seadogz - 2007-05-11 16:53
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I thank you for the comments, and the support ^_^
MichelleNG22 Comment by: MichelleNG22 - 2007-05-10 21:07
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We can't see the Mirror we can only see our skin/
Falsely loved by enemy, quietly hated by friend/

We can't see the Mirror we can only see our flaws/
Covered in make-up, hiding our beautiful scars/

^^ Loved that part

Beautifully done. I loved it through and through. Your word choice was perfect, your metaphors captivating. Simply Amazing! <3
rupertdepaula Comment by: rupertdepaula - 2007-05-10 20:27
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that's awsome dude. such powerful rythem - which many people forget about in poetry (it can such a powerfully expressive tool). yoou're not too worried about 'perfect' ryhmes too, which is cool.
this one's going on my bookshelf!
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