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ender2006
Jack Garrett
United States

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On the Waters' of Insanity

On the ocean of life we sailed off in blissfulness together.

Til the day you decided to ship off on your own.

For a time we continued side by side; I go one way and you'd follow

You go another way and I'd follow.


One day you just keep going; eventually leave our ocean.

The current of our love pulls me with you, but the closer I get the farther you go.

We find ourselves being slammed and tossed through rough waters.

Caught in a whirlpool; with every revolution we descend.

Getting evermore closer to our doom.



Like a wall the water surrounds us, moving in closer and closer.

The center draws you nearer, and your boat begins to crack; a whole burst and your boat

takes on water.

You turn to me with eyes the color of fresh honey on a hot summer day; my heart

implodes with the thought of loosing you.

I see the love you have for me, the love you have for us both; and all I want to do is save

you.

I throw out a life preserver.

You hold out your hands to catch; at the last minute you pull back your arms.

I throw another and another, again I throw again.

You do the same thing over and over.

Our descent seems to move slower; our doom is inevitable; yet we have slowed.

In your face I swear I see laughter, but I must be mistaken.
I cast out another life preserver.

You grasp it, hope flashes in my eyes.

The preserver falls from your hands; my mouth drops; the beginnings of a smirk form on

your face.

Time speeds up

Your boat reaches the center; it is torn apart and swallowed up.

My time is short.

I grab the anchor; I pitch it as high up the wall as I can.

It just reaches the top, my boat it jerked upward.



The anchor falls from the wall; passes my boat dead into the center.

The force of the whirlpool sucks me into it faster.

I race to my doom.

My boat begins to crack, a whole breaks in the middle; I take on water.

I hit the center, my boat cracks as loud as thunder.

The two currents pull away from themselves.

The wall collapses onto itself.

Water crashes down all around me; the resulting wave lifts me and my boat.

I soar through the air.

The sun and clouds are in the air; I pass by trees.

I land in mud and rocks, on the bank of a great river.


Selflessly I mourn my loss.

I watched her die, I watched her go; we should have shared the same fate.
Why me?

Why her?

Why should I live, why should she die?

I hear a sound, I look around.

There she is on the water.

Her boat is new; she waves my way.

Off into the sun she sails.

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Ecstasy Comment by: Ecstasy - 2007-11-23 11:36
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I liked this alot.
RJWilliams Comment by: RJWilliams - 2007-06-12 07:11
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lyrically yours Comment by: lyrically yours - 2007-06-12 06:25
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Wow, this was a great read, i really enjoyed and your play of words are phenomenal
LBCGURL79 Comment by: LBCGURL79 - 2007-05-22 11:10
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oh, love the title too. very bold and right on!
LBCGURL79 Comment by: LBCGURL79 - 2007-05-22 11:09
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I like this one too. Although, there is a bit of spelling errors. I totally appreciated the metaphor in this if thats what you meant to reflect. I have felt that way in a relationship, so I took it as a metaphor. I also enjoyed the fact that this poem leads you to keep reading to find out what happens. Good read other than the spelling errors.
thanks!
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