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vpapatheofani
Viviana Papatheofani
Greece, Attiki, GLYFADA

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Lime Juice Instead of...

I'm standing here on the edge, looking back on what we shared,
so many priceless moments, stuck there, back in time,
Warm embraces, hearfelt sentiments, wondering if you ever really cared,
I was expecting lemons, but you gave me a lime...



So broke out the tequila, and gave shots out all around,
they thought I'd gone crazy, only the red nose was missing from this clown,
seeing my pain & bound by our friendship, they uttered not even a sound,
for they new if I stopped, without you I would drown...



Yet, I put it all behind me, and came a million miles away,
gripping you so tightly, but I couldn't make you stay,
here comes the sun it's rising on a brand new day,
and life is being served, right on my breakfast tray...



I never wanted it to end, but I had to try...
Now all that's left is a sad GOODBYE!!!

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lflwriter Comment by: lflwriter - 2008-08-23 15:24
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Vivid portrayal of love lost and the pain that follows it. I'm left wondering if he left or died. One pain may endure longer than the other. My favorite line--"I was expecting lemons, but you gave me a lime..."
Dante Comment by: Dante - 2008-03-22 15:00
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I can feel the pain in this piece. Unreciprocated love is a hard pill to swallow and I think you conveyed that idea well here.

My only crit is that you may have left out the word "I" in "So broke out the tequila..."

Thanks for sharing, Dante.
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