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nevaordinarie
Hillary Moore
United States, Mississippi, Southaven

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a fish tale

they sat there often, she and the boy.
he had the strangest things to say.
of course, he would tell you, she had the strangest things not to say.
ah.
here he comes over the hill.
before he even sits down to put his feet in the clear brook, he will begin.
sure enough.
what was he saying?
clouds.
vitamins.
jello.
book.
paper.
eyes.
typewriters.
cats.
purple.
he drew breath.
she thrust her hand into the water.
she jerked out a large catfish.
slapped him with it.
and threw it kindly back in with a plop.
the fish, frazzled by contact with the boy's face, surfaced his guppy head.
"next time i'll bite off your nose, boy!"
he growled, as fishes do, and promptly swam away.

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Wildefriend Comment by: Wildefriend - 2008-05-10 07:30
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This is hysterical! Very funny...and the talking catfish? What a hoot!
And the catfish definitely sounds like he (or she) is from the South. You might consider making it a little longer so we can understand 1) if there is an attraction between the two, or 2) why he is the way he is.

Great!
FC
marinarena Comment by: marinarena - 2007-12-29 18:34
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oddball and memorable, fun play with imagery!
Ron Placone Comment by: Ron Placone - 2007-11-07 20:35
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For some reason your poem reminds me of the novel "The Perks of Being A Wallflower," which is a compliment because that is among my favorite books. It captures youth through imagery, I like it.
esthermorey Comment by: esthermorey - 2007-11-04 14:23
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LOL. Nice.
"the fish, frazzled by contact with the boy's face, surfaced his guppy head.
"next time i'll bite off your nose, boy!"
he growled, as fishes do, and promptly swam away."

Catchy yet nice.
nealmcdonald Comment by: nealmcdonald - 2007-07-17 18:51
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made me feel 12 years old again... nice ;)
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