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crackednotbroken
Identity Crisis
United States, Texas

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Lost In A Trance

She woke up suddenly and realized it was morning. Looking at her open window, the reality of her disappointment hit hard. She thought she heard a thud as her heart dropped. He didn't come. Her mind kept repeating those words as she lay there, frozen. Numb at first, she softly began crying. She had known he probably wouldn't.

She would have to face the reality that he just didn't want her at all. Even knowing, remembering the words he'd spoken only a few days ago, "You should see whoever you want. We cannot have a relationship.". Still she knew that when night came again she'd be ready and waiting. That even while sleeping she'd be hoping. She knew that she'd leave her window open.

It seemed that she could see him through it, while peering out with sleepy, lonely eyes. Despite her heart's yearnings and the pain of rejection. She'd peer through it, reminding her of sweeter moments. Why couldn't she just close it? Close the window, stop this illusion?

She didn't know, except she lay there lost, in thoughts of what might have been. The sun began to shine brighter, through her open window. The heat of the day now coming in. She could only distract herself now and close the window.

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LowIQ Comment by: LowIQ - 2008-01-11 03:57
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Decent, concise piece. Like a dip into another life. As Gothica noted, I also see the Vampire working here. Maybe too many ties watching old horror flicks.
redtwinsis Comment by: redtwinsis - 2008-01-10 19:31
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I can relate to this... I have loved and the feeling was not returned, and I waited in an illusion that things would change, but when one door closes another one opens, or window in this case...very sad...but this piece was very well written....
anastar Comment by: anastar - 2007-05-14 14:00
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very interesting, I could relate to this piece...to love and not be loved but still hoping it might change...sigh...it was well written and totally captivating.
wordsmith Comment by: wordsmith - 2007-05-14 09:09
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I like this read. It conveys a lot in its short form.
crackednotbroken Comment by: crackednotbroken - 2007-05-13 15:26
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Hey Gothica, I wasn't really going for that affect. The man she pines for is the one she is waiting for. You see, their love is forbidden, thus the reason he would not come to the door, but to her window.
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