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Dollz
Lainee Septhe
United States, California, San Fransisco

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Jealous.

He talks about how he admires her. How she does things that are so good, and how I can't do any of those. I want to prove him wrong, I want to tell him that what he thinks of her is wrong, but that's not who I am. If he wants to think of her as having great tolerance, he can. I'm not proving him wrong anymore. I just hate how he can see things in her that he can't see in me. What does it matter though? I can't change his views. I can't convince him otherwise. I can only sit here and type everything out, while he admires her from a distance, while he's still stuck with his pathetic girlfriend who can't do a thing, while he's stuck with me.

Notes:
-Maybe I am just jealous, but that still makes me a bad person, doesn't it?
-I had a heart to heart talk with my boyfriend. One of my friends just confessed to him that she likes him. He keeps telling me that she's worth nothing to him, but I know he's just saying that to please me. I'm tired of asking "What about me?". I'm just jealous.

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RedeMoon Comment by: RedeMoon - 2007-09-27 22:00
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So true and so human who hasn't felt like this before you very talented keep it up
LAMatthews Comment by: LAMatthews - 2007-06-10 14:06
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Very good, and very convincing piece. Keep writing.
carriedale Comment by: carriedale - 2007-05-31 17:45
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jealous is such a human thing to be! I am married and still get jealouss from time to time- I REALLY like your writing, I think you will do well.
dustindoornbos Comment by: dustindoornbos - 2007-05-16 06:24
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jelousy is a part of being a good person in this world. If you don't show some level of jelousy you will get walked on time and time again. You are a great writer, keep going.
anastar Comment by: anastar - 2007-05-15 22:40
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Wow, very heartfelt piece. Jealousy can be a very strong emotion but your piece isnt what I consider jealousy...idk..thats just my personal oppinion.

Nonetheless it was a very well written piece and got me hook from beginning to end.
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