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Loved the first two stanzas .
Good work. |
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| I like the last stanza... a great ending. Life can sometimes be like and algebraic equation: it is best when its promblems are simplified. The narrator could continue life and keep the memory of what or whoever was lost, or linger and make things all the more glum. |
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Comment by: - 2006-08-05 07:46
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| I just wanted to share that "Come Clean" is more of a song than a poem. Thank you all for providing your feedback. As far as "Come Clean" seeming to mumble and go around in circles, it is suppose to in order to project a daunting and seemingly endless emotional journey. |
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beautiful! I love the tone you have in this poem, so full of longing and yet trying to get away. "But the sun wonâ??t go away
Long enough for me to heal" I liked this part instantly! In fact i love all the last two lines of every stanza! Great poem. |
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Comment by: Min - 2006-06-24 23:30
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| It does seem to mumble a bit and go round in circles as maybe is the intention. Some of the lines are hard to keep to a rhythm when read out loud. |
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"Searching the Abyss"
Have you heard of that unexplained animal sighting up the road? Or been interested in organizing a trip searching for your native legends? If so, this is the book for you. This handbook outlines the world of cryptozoology, everything from its humble beginnings to collecting evidence in the field.
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