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Eyes of Compilation
Like the Earth's gravitational, they pulled me into your world.
Two glowing Orbs; Centering me with their rays, warming me to the core with each revolution'¦
Like a mystery, a dream, a spirit of my heart'¦You were there. You were there.
An enigma of Romance, of love'¦A spirit'¦a slight hint of all that could be. You were there'¦
The essence of you assembles, prophetically by words from songwriters over the years.
Through the waves of sound crashing upon the banks of my ears, I could meet you before I know you. I could see you but not touch you.
You are the spirit of all love songs. A feeling that engrosses the heart; Of hope and anticipation, some times lasting through the years, but most only for moments. You were as elusive as air'¦
For years You remained insubstantial and nameless'¦until now'¦I see you'¦Romance'¦
Spirit of the song.
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| Thank you very much Allysonmh; i am glad you liked it. |
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it paints a beautiful picture, i love this line, Through the waves of sound crashing upon the banks of my ears, I could meet you before I know you. I could see you but not touch you.
amazing, really |
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| Great poem! I love your line (an enigma of Romance, of love...A spirit...) This poem tends to convey, I think, your girlfriend as a goddess. Very creative and strong. Thanks for the read! |
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Good poem. It's hard to substantively critique, as is all poetry, so I'll give you my impressions: I thought the imagry was good, as were the metaphors (Through the waves of sound crashing upon the banks of my ears). I like the image but I want to ask you if you prefer "crashing into" instead of "crashing upon" Crashing is such a strong, forceful word and image; whereas "upon speaks to something more passive? If that's what you meant, then it worked. If not, maybe change 'upon' to 'over' or 'into'
-Jeff |
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| I like that first line a lot. The very last line, "For years [You] lower case no? |
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