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Astride A Frozen Horse
Oh foolish heart
How vexed thou art
With thy prize pursued afore
When all the while
Abaft ride I--nay guile
In pursuit of the soul I adore
Oh foolish heart
We play our part
This paralytic steed astride
With its frozen prance
A merry-go-round dance
To mad tunes we madly ride
Step off my dear
Step off right now--right here
And turn thee back around
I'll step off for thee
And as the tune fades see...
In my arms thy love is found!
"But nay!" say thee
"My heart -- you see
It must stay on a fool's course
And with each break
I take or make
I grow hard as this frozen horse!"
Oh foolish heart
Before thou start
Give our love some time -- a trial
For two days or three
Just stay with me
And you'll know my strength and style
"But then," thou sayist
"I would betray us
To the whims of another's fancy
Thy heart I'd break
And thee forsake
As I take another for a dance--see?"
That's fine my dear
I do not fear
To lose what I've yet to acquire
Your foolish heart
As from the start
Is what I most dearly desire
But you just smile and nod
As you chase that sod
On that rigormortized pony
And round thou go
But not I--no
I'm riding a horse less stony
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Comment by: Valerie - 2007-06-17 02:24
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I too, like the use of old English. You might want to read, Lance W Toohey.
You have similiar styles. The poem is very well written, and thoroughly enjoyed. "Rigimortized pony" - These are interesting words. Nice writing as usual. Don't stop! |
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| great title; favourite line: "But nay!" say thee (lol) > your use of archaic English is very studied and a welcome surprise > 'rigimortized pony' <> 'I'm riding a horse less stony'- throughout this jaunt is a distinct thread of wit; it's like a parody of John Donne: I'm certain it's his 'voice' you're imitating ! Very cool, bad pun intentional :) |
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| I've read quite a couple of your poems now and I must say I'm very impressed. This one in particular is quite beautiful. I like the old English. Not a lot of people can pull that off so successfully. Looking forward to getting my eyes on more of your work. |
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| As I thought, as too am I. |
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| Thankyou Artemis. This is the crux of love to chase one who chases another and so on. Its madness, its life, and I'm in the midst of it right now. |
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