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spilth
Jeanine Petro
United States, FL, Fort Lauderdale

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Reflection

to old friends and experiences

There is an elasticity in our perceptual realities.
Small parts of these, try to dominate our thinking.
An inkling or longing to pervade,
but as you wade in leisure, please her
by choosing the perception--with a suggestion or yearning
for the comfort of learning from our experiences.
Peers and pieces of our past collect and form an array
of stained glass granuals colliding intricately with simplicity and giving to the night.
Barely a chance to see the illumination in the other.
Smothered each moment, with a flicker and a fade
while we wade in each other's i's...intellect, ideas,images, insecurities
The vibe was clear. Hold dear perceptual lingual happenings
Avoiding traps and things: rather reveling in the gathering
and quietly sing...

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metaphysicalg Comment by: metaphysicalg - 2007-05-31 14:42
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This poem has a nice flow and it put my mind in a really peaceful place. Reading it was a rewarding experience in itself. Nice job.
MatthewMarquis Comment by: MatthewMarquis - 2007-05-23 14:09
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"Small parts of these, try to dominate our thinking."
I'd recommend either losing the comma or change the word "try" to "trying."

"Peers and pieces of our past..." I really like this.

"revel(l)ing"

Going back to the top. I love the placement and use of the word "elasticity." It really does a nice job of establishing the whole idea of reciprocity.

This was very nice.
mootiy Comment by: mootiy - 2007-05-23 07:01
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wow, this is a fantastic read. I really like it, makes me think about how everyone effects everyone else..
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