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SnowflakeRose
Snowflake Ward
United States, ar, Lincoln

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Untitled #14

There is a river into which I drown.
My breath I can not hold.
I sink down under and my story is never told.
There is a bough from which I fall.
It breaks with me each day.
I fall down slowly and my traitor never has to pay.
There is a grave from which I climb.
The dirt falls I can not see.
I follow instinct blindly, I can only now trust me.
There is a seed from which I grow.
I thirst now for water.
I sprout up tall and now I see, my fate I can not alter.
Snowflake Henson

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Audiogeist Comment by: Audiogeist - 2008-08-03 13:06
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Thanks for your speedy comment on my new poem! :)

I'm liking my first read of yor work.

I had a feeling of being sucked downby the emotional turmoil - although i liked the 'sprout' of hope.

nb: 'my fate I cannot alter'

My opinion of course - but i think read easier if you separated 'There is a bough' - 'There is a grave' & 'There is a seed' to separate stanzas?
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